Lumper's Entry: My Brother Unforgiven

Lumper · 12th December 2009, 10:29

Here's my entry: My Brother Unforgiven.

Youtube link: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4kSmDHOVxCw (it's in HD also)

I've taken inspiration from the old spaghetti westerns such as a Fistful of Dollars by Sergio Leone.

Enjoy!

lupoo · 12th December 2009, 10:43

This one's very nice in my eyes. I love that calm style. Not much of actual "motion" or "action" but still kinda thrilling.

Marazis · 12th December 2009, 10:47

nice one! but the end disappointed me :P

sCouraGe · 12th December 2009, 10:49

I liked this one. Hopefully you actually continue it

And I like how you showed the armor wit no blood and then showed how killing someone bloodies up your armor.

Tresilian · 12th December 2009, 10:53

I liked this one as well. Since it was more of a "Chaplin" style movie, I might have edited it with black&white style and some colour enhancements. Authentic video, good job!

Vale · 12th December 2009, 11:05

Best entry i've seen so far =) I liked the beginning best, nice camera angles

Kopatch · 12th December 2009, 11:07

great! good mood. the only thing i missed was a hitting or crunching noise when he hit him.
and maybe some text.

and maybe just maybe it was best to end the scene when he was charging his weapon on him, before he was hitting him.

-TYRANT- · 12th December 2009, 11:11

One of my favorite movies is "Once Upon a Time in The West" so I definetly appreciate the style you're going for here, but the ending seemed a little anticlimactic. Maybe if you at least played the sound of him dieing, or showed the ragdoll laying over the bloodstain briefly.

Lumper · 12th December 2009, 11:18

I understand what you mean about the end - however I was hoping that the off-screen, implied violence would be enough.

The other reason for not showing the death scene was that I was trying to show only images that accentuated a sense of realism or immersion. Some flying blood with the arm swinging down might have worked and would have been particularly gruesome, but the limitations of the short time frame to complete and the availability of actors on short notice came into play... maybe next time!

And thanks everyone for the great and constructive feedback so far

Pontius Pilate · 12th December 2009, 11:55

SERENITY NOW!

Sorry, seinfeld moment, but great vid, i like the whole feel and build up. I think you should do like a continuation where the next part will be more "evil", like the first part was serene and was building up to something and the next part will be a lil more fast paced and heavier music. Nicely done and want to see the next part.

catmorbid · 12th December 2009, 13:31

Very good. I especially liked your use of camera views. They made it feel much more "real" in the sense that you're actually trying to tell a story, instead of just showing some recorded and edited gameplay.

I agree with the others who said the ending was anticlimatic. Nevertheless, a very good entry in my opinion

Gobwar · 12th December 2009, 13:41

Lol these mmc:s just get better and better, great job!

Cronnix · 12th December 2009, 13:53

Nice machinima, liked the absence of text, to just enjoy the story.

P.S. Catmorbid, your avatar is seriously creepy ._.

StJudas · 12th December 2009, 13:56

Very nice!

Kamisama · 12th December 2009, 20:22

Sergio Leone western style = win

best machinima of all times

Lion1978 · 12th December 2009, 20:28

Greate work mate!

Trixxer · 12th December 2009, 20:32

Cool style. gj!

Flintwick · 12th December 2009, 21:10

Awesome, just awesome.

My current favourite, loved the editing, the camera angles, the feeling of actually watching a story unfold. Bravo sir, bravo.

All we need now is for someone to do a comedy voice-overed machinima entry and we will have it all

Flint

Kopatch · 12th December 2009, 21:26

Quote:

Originally Posted by Flintwick

Awesome, just awesome.

My current favourite, loved the editing, the camera angles, the feeling of actually watching a story unfold. Bravo sir, bravo.

All we need now is for someone to do a comedy voice-overed machinima entry and we will have it all

Flint

i believe thats kio's department

Gadzy · 12th December 2009, 21:33

Liked it. Wasn't just a landscape show like many others..

Cronnix · 12th December 2009, 21:38

Quote:

Originally Posted by Kopatch

i believe thats kio's department

Don't be so sure

Khaiyne · 13th December 2009, 00:38

I liked your camera work and use of lighting very much.

chappy · 13th December 2009, 23:50

brilliant x! felt like a real short film to me. dont listen to the anticlimactic crowd . they dont understand the power of imagination and iimplicit violence.. or maybe im just more disturbed than them...

Innocent · 14th December 2009, 07:44

Fantastic!

kelendil · 14th December 2009, 10:32

Great work, I enjoed it.

Rathius · 15th December 2009, 04:32

Some nice use of camera angles and editing here.

Sarkhan · 17th December 2009, 14:11

*golf clap*

A smashing video there Lumper, quite exhilarating... mhm, yes.

*sips tea*

This video needs more cowbell, personally.

12th December 2009, 10:29	#1 (permalink)
Lumper Junior Member Join Date: Mar 2009 Location: Glittering Plain	Lumper's Entry: My Brother Unforgiven Here's my entry: My Brother Unforgiven. Youtube link: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4kSmDHOVxCw (it's in HD also) I've taken inspiration from the old spaghetti westerns such as a Fistful of Dollars by Sergio Leone. Enjoy! __________________ Lumper :: Brother TBC HQ :: TBC Charter :: MO - Recruitment Thread Last edited by Lumper : 12th December 2009 at 11:04.

12th December 2009, 10:43	#2 (permalink)
lupoo Junior Member Join Date: Aug 2009 Location: Germany Age: 31	This one's very nice in my eyes. I love that calm style. Not much of actual "motion" or "action" but still kinda thrilling. __________________

12th December 2009, 10:49	#4 (permalink)
sCouraGe Senior Member Join Date: Mar 2009 Location: My Imagination	I liked this one. Hopefully you actually continue it And I like how you showed the armor wit no blood and then showed how killing someone bloodies up your armor. __________________ Solo, mmmmm

12th December 2009, 10:53	#5 (permalink)
Tresilian Junior Member Join Date: Jun 2009	I liked this one as well. Since it was more of a "Chaplin" style movie, I might have edited it with black&white style and some colour enhancements. Authentic video, good job! __________________ Source of information: http://www.mortalwiki.org

12th December 2009, 11:05	#6 (permalink)
Vale Member Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: Ireland Age: 20	Best entry i've seen so far =) I liked the beginning best, nice camera angles __________________ 1# ¥0/_/ ©4/\/ ®€4l) 7}{15 ¥0/_/ /\/33l) 70 637 141l)

12th December 2009, 10:47	#3 (permalink)
Marazis Junior Member Join Date: Sep 2009	nice one! but the end disappointed me :P

12th December 2009, 11:07	#7 (permalink)
Kopatch MMC'09 - 3rd place Join Date: Feb 2009 Age: 25	great! good mood. the only thing i missed was a hitting or crunching noise when he hit him. and maybe some text. and maybe just maybe it was best to end the scene when he was charging his weapon on him, before he was hitting him. __________________ God has mercy. I don't

12th December 2009, 11:11	#8 (permalink)
-TYRANT- Senior Member Join Date: Aug 2009 Location: In those bushes...	One of my favorite movies is "Once Upon a Time in The West" so I definetly appreciate the style you're going for here, but the ending seemed a little anticlimactic. Maybe if you at least played the sound of him dieing, or showed the ragdoll laying over the bloodstain briefly. __________________ \| Website \| Apply \| MOFO Thread \| Public MO Ventrilo \|

12th December 2009, 11:18	#9 (permalink)
Lumper Junior Member Join Date: Mar 2009 Location: Glittering Plain	I understand what you mean about the end - however I was hoping that the off-screen, implied violence would be enough. The other reason for not showing the death scene was that I was trying to show only images that accentuated a sense of realism or immersion. Some flying blood with the arm swinging down might have worked and would have been particularly gruesome, but the limitations of the short time frame to complete and the availability of actors on short notice came into play... maybe next time! And thanks everyone for the great and constructive feedback so far __________________ Lumper :: Brother TBC HQ :: TBC Charter :: MO - Recruitment Thread

12th December 2009, 11:55	#10 (permalink)
Pontius Pilate Junior Member Join Date: Jun 2009	SERENITY NOW! Sorry, seinfeld moment, but great vid, i like the whole feel and build up. I think you should do like a continuation where the next part will be more "evil", like the first part was serene and was building up to something and the next part will be a lil more fast paced and heavier music. Nicely done and want to see the next part. __________________

12th December 2009, 13:31	#11 (permalink)
catmorbid Member Join Date: Jun 2008 Location: Finland	Very good. I especially liked your use of camera views. They made it feel much more "real" in the sense that you're actually trying to tell a story, instead of just showing some recorded and edited gameplay. I agree with the others who said the ending was anticlimatic. Nevertheless, a very good entry in my opinion __________________ Judgement and Perserverance "There's more to the picture, than meets the eye" Topics of Interest: MO info summary, Great Cat God Felissos, Aegis Imperium, Immersive Damage & Health, Damage and Audio, Artifical Restrictions, Roleplay and You

12th December 2009, 13:56	#14 (permalink)
StJudas Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2009	Very nice! __________________

12th December 2009, 20:28	#16 (permalink)
Lion1978 Member Join Date: Feb 2009 Location: Austria/Salzburg Age: 32	Greate work mate! __________________ SI VIS PACEM PARABELLUM

12th December 2009, 20:32	#17 (permalink)
Trixxer Senior Member Join Date: Jun 2008 Location: Sweden	Cool style. gj!

12th December 2009, 21:10	#18 (permalink)
Flintwick Member Join Date: May 2009 Location: UK	Awesome, just awesome. My current favourite, loved the editing, the camera angles, the feeling of actually watching a story unfold. Bravo sir, bravo. All we need now is for someone to do a comedy voice-overed machinima entry and we will have it all Flint __________________ Flint Block A - Loot Bag 752/999 TOG - Where old gamers go to... game some more

12th December 2009, 21:33	#20 (permalink)
Gadzy Junior Member Join Date: Jun 2009 Location: Denmark	Liked it. Wasn't just a landscape show like many others..

13th December 2009, 00:38	#22 (permalink)
Khaiyne Senior Member Join Date: Dec 2008 Location: Australia	I liked your camera work and use of lighting very much. __________________ _/(°_o)/¯ like an egyptian.. "I kept correcting the grammar of a journalist until she sent me the bill"

13th December 2009, 23:50	#23 (permalink)
chappy Junior Member Join Date: Mar 2009	brilliant x! felt like a real short film to me. dont listen to the anticlimactic crowd . they dont understand the power of imagination and iimplicit violence.. or maybe im just more disturbed than them...

14th December 2009, 10:32	#25 (permalink)
kelendil Junior Member Join Date: Nov 2008	Great work, I enjoed it.

15th December 2009, 04:32	#26 (permalink)
Rathius Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2008	Some nice use of camera angles and editing here. __________________ -< Counter - Armillogion Device - History - Conflux >- -< Maps of Myrland >-

17th December 2009, 14:11	#27 (permalink)
Sarkhan Member Join Date: Mar 2009 Location: The Glittering Plain	golf clap A smashing video there Lumper, quite exhilarating... mhm, yes. sips tea This video needs more cowbell, personally. __________________ Sarkhan :: Veteran TBC HQ :: TBC Charter :: MO - Recruitment Thread